I would suggest that you don't continue, unless you've already read both of the texts submitted so far.
I'm pretty sure there will be spoilers.
I really liked Alumette's story. Quite original, since it seemed completely unrelated at first, but then, turned out to be more than relevant. Imperial had very little "air time", but it shown how a single decision he makes can save lives and influence people on an extremely profound level. He probably didnt even realize what he really did, when he saved the orphanage. For him, it was just another bomb to take care of, but for everyone else, it was pretty much a miracle. I think that was very well depicted in the story.
In my opinion, this aspect of heroism isnt touched often enough.
I also liked how Lydia was shown in a very personal way. All those little details, like tapping the headboard, made me care about her much more.
I would also like to add that her "going to sleep routine" was very moving.
The only thing is, that the explosion onomatopoeia seemed a little silly. You might want to replace it with something like "whirling sounds approached menacingly"
, for example.
Overall though, great stuff!
TopHat's story was quite good as well. There were a few spelling mistakes, but i guess that's hard to avoid in such a long text.
Imperial was really portrayed as a true icon that he is. A superstar of the elite. Perhaps the extreme wealth was even exaggerated a little.
One thing about the descriptions though, the fact that you added a lot of adjectives did help making them more rich, but you might want to try making it a little more diverse by putting a periphrasis here and there. You know, like instead of "subtle smile"
, you could write "a smile that melts hearts in its slightness"
The story presented by the text was definitely an interesting piece of text, showing that Imperial can never feel safe.
I could even say, it would make a great subject for a comic book adaptation.
The final battle was very difficult to present, with all the action, both in Imperial's head and outside, but i think you described it very well. Imagining it went very smoothly for me. I also think that you revealed Sarah's true intentions in the exact right moment, just when i cought on myself.
In general, it was definitely a good read. Keep it up!